The wind will tousle my hair
..The wind will tousle my hair
.....With its breaths warm like your hands
......../That give comfort everywhere/
...........And do the same with no pretence.
..You always kiss me in the evenings
.....In the way that makes me purr.
........The wind will whisper in my ear
...........Its breaths that I will take for words
..I'm used to hear you say as well
.....And feel you touch my lips with your ones
........In that very loving way
...........That seems to make my life eternize.
..The only moment that is left
.....For you's to let my hair down.
........So, soon you touch it with your hand
...........And give the things another round.
You always kiss me in the evenings
In the way that makes me purr.
The wind will whisper in my ear
Its breaths that I will take for words
рифма me purr и for words немного не идет на слух.
во втором катрене третья строка in that very loving way нарушает ритм.
очень понравился смысл последних строк 4-го катрена. Лирично, с привкусом иронии
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сб, 09/07/2011 - 20:07